PREVIEW: Shadow of Darkness (Star Wars Fan-Fiction)

Hope you enjoy this quick preview of my fan-fiction! I've still got a long way to go on it, so don't expect the whole thing anytime soon. But here's a sneak-peek.

The entire thing will probably only be around 20-25ish pages long, but I'm working slowly to make it as great as possible. I'd love your feedback, whether positive or critically constructive!

(This excerpt takes place around the middle of the story)

     The passage of the cave that Fox had chosen seemed the darkest of them all. But it was the one his senses had led him to, so he could not take another. He, too, knew he would have to combat his greatest weakness to find his own kyber crystal. Qui-Gon had instructed him to try and determine what it was himself, but he had not been able to know for sure. I guess I’ll figure it out soon, he thought to himself. And all of a sudden – his answer came. Standing right in front of him.

The youngling fell backwards to the ground in terror. His heart froze as he stared, unable to look away, at the figure standing over him. He felt much like he had when the Beasts had attacked his village on Ryloth. And that was because right in front of him, unmistakable even in this dark tunnel, was a Beast. Fox had seen them before; he knew what they were and what they looked like. Just like all the Beasts, this one had dark cloths and robes covering its entire humanoid body, even its face. On them were disturbing designs and strange and dangerous weapons. Somehow, though, this one seemed even more terrifying. Every part of its large, tall body spoke of evil, and the thirst for it. Perhaps most people would be (apart from terrified) confused at this point as to what this creature from Ryloth would be doing in a sacred cave on Ilum, accessible only to the Jedi. For Fox, however, his foremost emotion was anger. Anger at the creatures of this one’s kind. Anger at their massacre of the Twi’lek people – his people. Anger at everything they lived for.

“You will pay for what you did,” Fox hissed as he cowered on the ground.

The creature let out a strange, long laugh. “That was one of my easiest jobs. Your people were weak,” it said. Its voice was like no other. It sounded more machine than man, with a deep growl and some broken words.

“All you stand for is death and destruction! What did you have against my people, and my mother, you monster?” Fox snarled.

The Beast laughed again. “She was weak too. And easy to dispose of,” it added.

At this, Fox let out a scream of fury and, like he did in the village ruins on Ryloth, hurled himself at the creature. Both fell to the ground with the young Twi’lek on top, giving blow after blow to the covered face of the Beast. Despite all his strength and the power he gained from his anger, however, Fox soon found himself being lifted high up by the strong arms of the creature and thrown down with great force to the solid ground. The Beast put his heavy foot on the struggling boy’s chest and let out yet another hideous laugh.

“You still have much to learn, puny Jedi. The only way you’re getting your little crystal,” and he paused, “is by following me.”

“You expect me to follow YOU?” Fox said angrily, still struggling in vain under the Beast’s hold. “You know nothing about this cave.”

“And you do?”

Fox would have continued to argue, but he realized there was more truth in that than he knew. He realized that he didn’t understand this cave at all. Powerless against this creature, he realized he was not the great and powerful Jedi he always thought himself to be, and perhaps he never would be.